Comments for Tangles --- a novel by ArgodAhen http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com Just another WordPress.com weblog Sat, 17 Nov 2007 17:41:53 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on (A1) Chapter1 Visitor by To read the novel click the links to the chapters on the right « Tangles — a novel by ArgodAhen http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/about/#comment-12 To read the novel click the links to the chapters on the right « Tangles — a novel by ArgodAhen Sat, 17 Nov 2007 17:41:53 +0000 #comment-12 [...] for the story and click here to start [...] [...] for the story and click here to start [...]

]]> Comment on (A1) Chapter1 Visitor by argodahen http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/about/#comment-11 argodahen Tue, 06 Nov 2007 18:32:36 +0000 #comment-11 Sierdsma, Thanks for your comment and your suggestion. No doubt, the usual practice is to make each statement a separate paragraph. But I have tried to put together those exchanges which fit together into one paragraph. I think certain comments and statements in a conversation go together and form one bulk. Keeping them together in one paragraph appears to me to be more logical. Sierdsma,
Thanks for your comment and your suggestion.

No doubt, the usual practice is to make each statement a separate paragraph. But I have tried to put together those exchanges which fit together into one paragraph. I think certain comments and statements in a conversation go together and form one bulk. Keeping them together in one paragraph appears to me to be more logical.

]]> Comment on (A1) Chapter1 Visitor by M.Sierdsma http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/about/#comment-10 M.Sierdsma Tue, 06 Nov 2007 15:43:03 +0000 #comment-10 I like the style -- it has a fable-like quality to it. However, sometimes dialogue is easier to read if each quoted piece is set off in it's own paragraph, for example: Rajesh was not the type who would make fuss about small things. “I am a disciplined kid of a school teacher who treated his house as a class room,” he told Sheetal on the first night of their marriage. And from then onwards, she could see in him the product of a home-turned-school where the children were not expected to talk loudly or show anger. "Why don’t you shout at me, as other husbands do?” Sheetal once asked him. “You are too sweet for that.” He pinched her cheek. I like the style — it has a fable-like quality to it.

However, sometimes dialogue is easier to read if each quoted piece is set off in it’s own paragraph, for example:

Rajesh was not the type who would make fuss about small things. “I am a disciplined kid of a school teacher who treated his house as a class room,” he told Sheetal on the first night of their marriage.

And from then onwards, she could see in him the product of a home-turned-school where the children were not expected to talk loudly or show anger.

“Why don’t you shout at me, as other husbands do?” Sheetal once asked him.

“You are too sweet for that.” He pinched her cheek.

]]> Comment on To read the novel click the links to the chapters on the right by argodahen http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/2007/10/12/hello-world/#comment-9 argodahen Tue, 06 Nov 2007 14:28:36 +0000 #comment-9 Me, thanks for your suggestion. Since this is my first novel, I would like to put it up where everyone can read it and give comments. I wish to learn from others. Once I am sure of readers searching for my writings, I may begin to think of the less public means of making my writings available. Me, thanks for your suggestion. Since this is my first novel, I would like to put it up where everyone can read it and give comments. I wish to learn from others. Once I am sure of readers searching for my writings, I may begin to think of the less public means of making my writings available.

]]> Comment on To read the novel click the links to the chapters on the right by Me http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/2007/10/12/hello-world/#comment-8 Me Tue, 06 Nov 2007 14:20:29 +0000 #comment-8 Keep in mind that if you post your novel here to a blog, it is considered published, and it will make it near impossible to find a publisher who would take it on after the fact. If traditional publication is not your aim, than of course, proceed. :-) Just a friendly chip of advice from a fellow writer. Keep in mind that if you post your novel here to a blog, it is considered published, and it will make it near impossible to find a publisher who would take it on after the fact. If traditional publication is not your aim, than of course, proceed. :-) Just a friendly chip of advice from a fellow writer.

]]> Comment on (A3) Chapter 3 Fear by argodahen http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/3-fear/#comment-7 argodahen Wed, 31 Oct 2007 10:30:24 +0000 http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/3-fear/#comment-7 Colin, This is an interesting exercise where I am virtually writing the novel on the blog. I don't know how many people might have done this, but it is very interesting to do this. Had I not thrown the first two chapters open for comments, I would have missed valuable comments and might have finished the whole novel in the descriptive-article style and then realised that the style needed change. By writing the novel on the blog I am able to simultaneously write the chapters and read the reactions of the readers. This sort of interactive novel-writing is a unique experience and helps to correct the course of the story as you go along. Colin,
This is an interesting exercise where I am virtually writing the novel on the blog. I don’t know how many people might have done this, but it is very interesting to do this. Had I not thrown the first two chapters open for comments, I would have missed valuable comments and might have finished the whole novel in the descriptive-article style and then realised that the style needed change. By writing the novel on the blog I am able to simultaneously write the chapters and read the reactions of the readers. This sort of interactive novel-writing is a unique experience and helps to correct the course of the story as you go along.

]]> Comment on (A2) Chapter 2 Suspicion by argodahen http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/2-suspicion/#comment-6 argodahen Wed, 31 Oct 2007 10:23:28 +0000 http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/2-suspicion/#comment-6 Colin, Of course there are cultural differences which make the reactions quite different. I feel the same type of difficulty when I see something like Bold and Beautiful. The readiness with which a girl accepts a former lover who assures that he will not visit the "other woman" again would be unacceptable in any of the South-Asian countries. I must acknowledge that your comments have helped me bring clarity to my style of writing. I appreciates the interest taken by you. Colin,
Of course there are cultural differences which make the reactions quite different. I feel the same type of difficulty when I see something like Bold and Beautiful. The readiness with which a girl accepts a former lover who assures that he will not visit the “other woman” again would be unacceptable in any of the South-Asian countries.

I must acknowledge that your comments have helped me bring clarity to my style of writing. I appreciates the interest taken by you.

]]> Comment on (A3) Chapter 3 Fear by Colin Peters http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/3-fear/#comment-5 Colin Peters Tue, 30 Oct 2007 19:40:30 +0000 http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/3-fear/#comment-5 The comment by POP on the first segment might have some truth to it. This is going very quickly for a novel. Perhaps you have some complications in mind, but the pacing is much more like a short story. I don't quite agree with his comment that things need to be slowly established at the beginning, I like books that throw the reader right into the thick of things, but they do need to develop at an appropriate pace. It may just be that you have a short story or novella sized idea, in which case this pace could be fine. I suggest you let the story develop at the pace that seems natural instead of trying to expand it unnecessarily, but be prepared not to get a novel in the end. The comment by POP on the first segment might have some truth to it. This is going very quickly for a novel. Perhaps you have some complications in mind, but the pacing is much more like a short story. I don’t quite agree with his comment that things need to be slowly established at the beginning, I like books that throw the reader right into the thick of things, but they do need to develop at an appropriate pace.

It may just be that you have a short story or novella sized idea, in which case this pace could be fine. I suggest you let the story develop at the pace that seems natural instead of trying to expand it unnecessarily, but be prepared not to get a novel in the end.

]]> Comment on (A2) Chapter 2 Suspicion by Colin Peters http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/2-suspicion/#comment-4 Colin Peters Tue, 30 Oct 2007 19:31:47 +0000 http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/2-suspicion/#comment-4 There is a problem here with culture, I expect. To me, the worries of Sheetal about the reappearance of her former lover seem a little exaggerated in the last chapter, although not too much. This chapter, however, seems very strange because Sheetal is worried that her *former lover* is showing interest in her fifteen year old daughter, whereas I would expect everyone (especially her husband) to be uncomfortable with a middle-aged man showing interest in a fifteen year old girl. The revelation that he thinks Naavika is his daughter resolves things, but the reactions of Sheetal and her husband in the first half of this segment are quite different from what an average North American reader might expect. There is a problem here with culture, I expect. To me, the worries of Sheetal about the reappearance of her former lover seem a little exaggerated in the last chapter, although not too much. This chapter, however, seems very strange because Sheetal is worried that her *former lover* is showing interest in her fifteen year old daughter, whereas I would expect everyone (especially her husband) to be uncomfortable with a middle-aged man showing interest in a fifteen year old girl.

The revelation that he thinks Naavika is his daughter resolves things, but the reactions of Sheetal and her husband in the first half of this segment are quite different from what an average North American reader might expect.

]]> Comment on (A1) Chapter1 Visitor by argodahen http://tanglesnovel.wordpress.com/about/#comment-3 argodahen Tue, 23 Oct 2007 06:17:38 +0000 #comment-3 Dear POP, Thanks for taking out time to read, and thanks for your suggestion. I have tried to throw the reader straight into a situation, so that he is not put off by long introductory paragraphs. Someone who does not mind reading 50 pages in a Hardy novel to come to action may not go through the second paragraph in a novel on a blog that he chances upon. That is why I decided to catch the reader before something else detracts him. All the same, I value your comment. May be, once I am through to the 5th or 6th chapter and have built up a readership, I'll re-edit the earlier chapters and give it the typical novel-touch. With warm regards, ArgodAhen Dear POP,
Thanks for taking out time to read, and thanks for your suggestion. I have tried to throw the reader straight into a situation, so that he is not put off by long introductory paragraphs. Someone who does not mind reading 50 pages in a Hardy novel to come to action may not go through the second paragraph in a novel on a blog that he chances upon. That is why I decided to catch the reader before something else detracts him.

All the same, I value your comment. May be, once I am through to the 5th or 6th chapter and have built up a readership, I’ll re-edit the earlier chapters and give it the typical novel-touch.

With warm regards,
ArgodAhen

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